Tuesday, September 6, 2011

Swinging Doors

So part of the platform building campaign is challenges. Rachael posted the first one on Monday. The challenge? To write a piece of flash fiction that is 200 words or less that begins with the phrase "the door swung open." Optional parts of the challenge are to make it 200 words exactly and  to close out the piece with "the door swung shut."

Now, if you know anything about me, I don't write short. It's a miracle I tweet as much as I do since brevity definitely ain't the soul of my wit. Because of this, it shouldn't surprise you that it took me three hours to come up with 200 words.

But, I did it. *points to paragraphs below* No title yet, sorry!

The door swung open. The conversation in the media room ceased.

Dusk kept himself poised in the doorway until the shock of his arrival wore off. For the barrage of questions to begin.  Last night’s performance was magnifique. Of course they would want to know more about his inspiration, his motivation…his process.

“Dahlings, I await your questions with bated breath.” He struck a pose for added effect. The camera flashes were too bright and Dusk shaded his eyes from the glare.

A busty reporter in a white mini dress asked the first question. “Why did you modernize The Cask of Amontillado?”

“I was inspired.”

Several questions followed hers and he answered every one. The entire time he kept his focus on the busty reporter. As the questions drew to an end, she closed the distance between them and pressed herself against him.

“What will your next project be?” she breathed against his lips.

A flirty response was on Dusk’s lips, but the reporter’s face aged twenty years. An older woman now stood beside him in a nurse’s white uniform.

“Mr. Dyson, it’s time medication time.” She led him through the common room out into the hallway.

The door swung shut. 

If you liked my flash piece, please be nice and go over to Rachael's blog and vote for me? I'm number 217.

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Last.fm hit of the day: Day of the Dead by Voltaire

18 comments:

  1. This was good! I liked the twist at the end

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  2. Love little twists like this! :)

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  3. This was fabulous, Alicia! Great job - with a lovely twist at the end. Oh, to grow old...

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  4. Oh, Alicia, I LOVE how you ended this! Made me think of One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest. Fantastic job!

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  5. LOVED the twist at the end! I'm heading over to vote for you :)

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  6. This is great. Loved the end!

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  7. Your twist at the end caught me off guard ! Well done ! Gives me the impression that your MC was quite the casanova back in his hey-days ... in addition to being a flamboyant performer ! Is there more where this came from ?
    My entry is no.#59

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  8. That was pretty cool, very unexpected!

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  9. That was awesome! Quite the imagination this guys has, or re-envisioning. Was not expecting that at all. Great job! :)

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  10. Excellent twist at the end. Left me rethinking the beginning and looking for hints I missed.

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  11. Love this! You totally had me! Such an unexpected ending! Great job!

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  12. Ha ha, that was a great twist. nice job. mine is #72

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  13. Welcome to the top five! Congratulations!

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  14. Oh, that makes me want to give him a big hug! Great twist at the end there.

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